Grade my SAT essay please on 2 - 12?

Actually sir, it's all about philosophy. If that is what you believed then make a stand and fight for it. There is no monopoly in knowledge in the first place. Everybody has the right to chose. We are free as what is taught in Existentialism, absolute freedom but of course with limitation as long as it abides with the moral law. A choice is always a choice. The decision is all yours, just be brave for whatever consequences that you may face in the future. It might be negative for you but in the reciprocal might be a positive side for the others.